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PostSubject: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 3:56 am

God

Red on the water
A stark contrast
Like her ivory skin against the dark night
She wasn’t supposed to be there
Something wasn’t right
Her dark curls are damp with sweat
She made a mistake
She hadn’t meant to hurt him
But, oh she had
She smiled at the thought of his fair hair in her grip
As she held him while the knife went farther in
It wasn’t her place
To punish him for his mistake
But, if he could play God
Why couldn’t she?
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 4:32 am

28:06:42:12

The familiar faces of Death surround you,
You feel your bones grow weary,
And your will to live dissipate
As you look at their expressionless faces
That somehow, tell you all you need to know

Time, your only enemy, has taken its toll
Death, your best friend, offers his solace
Life, your condescending superior, scoffs
“Go on, do it. No one will miss you, you are insignificant.”
He taunts, daring you to take the safety off.

You do.
You cock the gun as an idea comes to mind,
All living creatures die alone
You’re not an exception to this philosophy, you realize
You are not alone, yet
You are insignificant.

Somehow, this calms you.
Somehow, this brings you peace.
Somehow, this gives you the push you need.

You smile as you put the gun to your head,
You are not alone.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 4:37 am

I like it. (:
And ohmigawd. I could never write something so long. >.<
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 5:08 am

Thank you, love. c:
Ha, the second one was for school, but it was deemed 'inappropriate for class'. I had to write a whole new poem >sigh<
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 8:55 am

God: Wow. This piece is weird! I had to reread it many times. I don't quite get the idea behind, but the imagery is awesome. Vivid, distinct.

28:06:42:12: This made me reread it for it's pure perfection. Again, your imagery here is just nice, not too lengthy and also not too skimpy. Very beautiful and succinct piece of write. None of the lines can stand out without each other, rather all of them stand out in their own unique ways. I love how you create a whole new imagery I've never seen before. Just curious, could this be about seeking suicide by cutting yourself? I don't know, but it reads like one. And if it is, I pray you, get better! You make a difference! Even more so with your powerful writes. Live on!

Your writes aren't too long, nor too short. In fact, I think your poem has as unique taste to it. It gives the reader some vivid images and tells a story, yet doesn't give away everything. It leaves the reader hanging at the end, to imagine. KUDOS! Keep writing dear! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 1:09 pm

thank you so much ger >blush<
actually, i was suicidal, but not cutting myself. i have severe depression, but i'm okay now. thank you though <3
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 1:12 pm

It should be me who thank you instead! For sharing such beautiful writes. /bows/ Thank you!

If you ever feel lonely, remember to PM alright? I check it regularly. Don't die! I still want to read more of your writes!
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 1:13 pm

Oh yes, and you look pretty (if that's you in your display picture). (: Appreciate yourself!
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 2:15 pm

that is me, aha. thank you again ger. >blush<
and i'll be sure to PM you sometime <3
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 2:19 pm

Reaching

She feels it through her skin
He’s cut her deep this time
She knows she shouldn’t have let him in
But, some things she can’t help
Like the cuts on her wrist
Those were a mistake
A little bit of self hate
Taken too far
But, somehow never far enough
Far enough away
Away from the pain
The pain that boils under her skin
Her skin, painted with pink lines
These scars, they tell her story
A story of regret, anger and pain
He’s hurt her this time
A little too much
She’s going under
How can anyone reach her,
When she can’t even reach herself?
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 5:49 pm

Beauty

With grace she walks
With care she talks
She is beauty
Or is it just an appearance?
On the inside, she hurts
On her wrists, she burns
She is gone
Gone into the dark
She is falling
Falling, falling apart
On the outside, she is perfect
On the inside, she is broken
But one sees
He sees her scars
He reads into her lies
He knows
She slows
Slows to a stop
The world is still
She waits, time to kill
He comes, he talks
She listens, she walks
Walks home, alone
She is tired of being alone
Alone in this world
So she leaves
She is gone
She is gone
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 6:36 pm

Wow.
All of your poems are touching.
and I can picture them all.
Keep writing.
I do enjoy reading them.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 6:48 pm

thank you <3
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sat Dec 24, 2011 11:52 pm

Reaching is nice. Not that 'nice' persay, but touching, vivid and real. Good writing. Made me feel like I am her. Ouch!

Love you <3 and your writes too! Pretty, beautiful, sweet, deep.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sun Dec 25, 2011 3:17 am

i, too, love you ger <3
and, >blush< thank you.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Sun Dec 25, 2011 3:19 am

Live and Live Well

Death’s lustful glare follows you,
You don’t have long before His glare becomes a gleam of victory.
So, live and live well.

Death’s cold veil hovers above you,
Threatening to cover you.
Soon, gravity will play its part
And the veil will come down.
So, please, live and live well.

As Life finally leaves you,
You smile at Death because,
You have lived and lived well.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Mon Dec 26, 2011 2:29 am

This is... I am at loss for words. It makes me tear, really. How you fight death till the end, and even though you knew he had won, you put on a smile because you know he didn't take everything from you. You smile cause you still hold something that he didn't manage to take from you.a bitter struggle, but it is the end that makes all the more touching.yes indded, we have to to 'live on and live well'.
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Mon Dec 26, 2011 5:05 pm

Exactly! You really understand me, Ger. >blush< Thank you <3
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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Mon Dec 26, 2011 5:09 pm

A scene from an idea i had for an epic poem.




THE TRADEGY OF CALISTRO, KING OF NOTHING.


EXT. HILLSIDE PASTURE - MIDDAY
A pasture with sheep grazing. Shepherd is herding sheep further down the hillside.
[Enter CALISTRO, stage left, out of breath from running, sits down amongst flocks of sheep.]


CALISTRO: (sighs) On this day, in the nineteenth year of my birth, I, Calistro,
King of Esthena, have lost everything. Nyx!
My goddess, my mother, have you forgotten the son you birthed only nineteen years past?
Or, have you chosen to ignore my cries? For it was you and my father
Who have caused this terrible plague cast down upon me!
Not I, Calistro, king of beggars, no I have done nothing to offend the gods.
Have I not sacrificed a plump lamb in your honour each month,
Mighty Zeus? Have I not plowed the ground and sowed your seeds,
Gracious Demeter? Have I not praised you, grey-eyed Athena, for
Watching over my sisters? I have! (stands up) That
Is why I did not believe the old beggar, Sofanor, on the many occasions he
Told me of your anger. But, once I was thrown from my castle,
I knew it was true. You have forsaken me, Athena! Why?
It was not I who had stolen Nyx from Pasicrates, it was my father!
And, what punishment has he received? A quick death by sword and
Payment to the boatman? That is no punishment! As for my mother, Nyx,
What punishment has been chosen for her? Nothing!
(slowly sits down amongst the flocks) But, for me, Calistro,
King of sorrow, you have chosen my punishment.
You took my father from me when I was barely a man,
Leaving me to care for his seven daughters,
And his grieving wife, Polyssandra, whom,
Overcome with grief, took her own life soon after.
I became king of Esthena, father of seven, and a man
All in haste. As I grieved my father and his wife, you and only you,
Athena, plagued each of the seven sisters of mine
You once protected. You killed one of them each month,
Until summer and autumn had both passed. Your wrath
Was strong against even young Alithea,
A child of only three, drowned right before these eyes (claws at eyes).
And, when I thought the gods had taken everything from me,
Your wrath was stronger still. You took my home from me,
My kingdom from me, you turned my people against me, Athena,
Yet, still, I have not forsaken you.
I, Calistro, king of nothing, wonders if your wrath is stronger still.
(reaches into robes and retrieves a dagger, proceeds to stab himself in the chest).

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PostSubject: Re: Ash's Poetry <$   Tue Dec 27, 2011 3:21 pm

Haha. Interesting. Sounds like her wrath wss strong, making him kill himself after taking everything from him. Nice one!
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